Stench of burning flesh
Bloody innards
Slashed inside out
Delicate lacerations
Carefully executed
Controlled frenzy
living art
On display for a few hours only
Skip dinner
Feast your eyes
And mind
While it still breathes
Through fevered eyes
And a choked gullet
Croaking silently
for release
Oblivion won't come easy
You're on camera honey
Every ounce
of well earned pain
Gifted with razor sharp
tenderness...
And all I can taste is this moment,
And all I can breathe is your life,
And sooner or later it's over,
I just don't want to miss you tonight.
And I don't want the world to see me,
'Cause I don't think that they'd understand.
When everything's made to be broken,
I just want you to know who I am.
I want you to know who I am
(Iris- the Goo Goo dolls)
Powerful poem- the impact lingers.
ReplyDeleteImagery and experience so strong!
Love the reference to one of my favorite songs, one I wrote a post for long before I met you on the net.
The working on the insides!! Very nicely done and the added emotions from Iris go very well to :))
ReplyDeletehere after a looooooooooooooooooong time!
ReplyDeletegosh , i hv misd so much!
glad to b bak!
*Feast your eyes* ...
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silvermoon: thank you. send me a link to your piece.
ReplyDeletepb: insides and outsides :)
bohemian: nice to have you back!
merryweather: yes, do :D
Hmmm. Black it is :)
ReplyDeletea steamhammer.
ReplyDeletea fistful of powrful words and emotions.
Powerfull Words..
ReplyDelete:)
..Me
prerona: my favoutrite colour :)
ReplyDeletecj: thanks. powerful comment :D
cherie: need lots more feedback. the first draft had no capitals till I thought it meant every line ran into the other and changed it-also an element of empohasis for no particular reason I guess...thanks for spending time here :)
rose: thank you beautiful
Razor sharp tenderness .... wow!
ReplyDeleteThe last para is too good.
>>Razor sharp tenderness .... wow!
ReplyDeletemy thoughts exactly!
inky this was a good un, how many gasses of wine did you pour down to come out with such a master piece ey?
This reminds of an art exhibit I read about in New York. The artist was making what looked like butchered human body parts out of wire, wax, etc.
ReplyDeleteThat last stanza is mind blowing.
Aria: you can do a lot more with razors if you use them gently :P
ReplyDeletesan: I'm actually on doonguley tea from Korea, young lady!
doc: now that you mention it, I recall seeing something similiar in a series of black and white photographs somewhere in Europe- and it was a bride being massacred I think (though in very un-'killbill' fashion) Must look for my notes on the artiste!
Disturbing and touching at the same time. Beautifully written!
ReplyDeleteGood one...
ReplyDelete[Iris---A favorite song of mine]
Cheers...:)
Flights of the mind
casablanca: thanks very much
ReplyDeleteflights of the mind: good to have you here again. thanks