In a darkened room
In a bright blue gloom
Someone somewhere
Is weeping.
In a bold red place
In an arrogant face
Someone somewhere
is laughing.
In a cold bleak home
Where only shadows roam
Someone somewhere
Is praying.
In an orange mess
Of sweet success
Someone somewhere
Is celebrating.
In a crackling fire
Of wasted desire
Someone somewhere
Is burning.
In a glow of hope
With baby soap
Someone somewhere
Is crooning.
In a stash of dirt
Penniless and hurt
Someone somewhere
Is begging.
With a stroke of luck
Making a buck
Someone somewhere
Is jumping.
With a cracked lip
No water to sip
Someone somewhere
Is sinking.
With a ripe rich roast
And joys to toast
Someone somewhere
Is grinning.
With a black broken heart
Ripped slowly apart
Someone somewhere
Is dying.
In the clear sunlight
and all through the night
Someone somewhere
Is living
Believing
Smiling
Making love
Making believe?
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17 comments:
nice :)
the mauve and red look nice too!
"In a crackling fire
Of wasted desire
Someone somewhere
Is burning."
For right now, I am feeling close to this someone...
that final line is the killer. this is sooooooooo friggin' good. you have style that is uniquely your own.
refreshingly bold.
I like parts of this. This needs a revist.
The ending was unexpectedly bright. Made me smile :)
hall of fame. my personal. mind f blowing. will u work on it more?
With a black broken heart
Ripped slowly apart
Someone somewhere
Is dying
Awww! i love you babe :)
Quite a tour of emotion. I can't keep up with all that you bring.
Aparna: I like experimenting, though I think some poeple may think its a bit much!
Aradhita: write poetry then
CJ: bold? I thought it was cold :->
SS: 'bright' as in positive? Will develop on the theme at some point when I have more patience
P: yes,(see above) suggestions welcome
Death: stop wallowing
Ô¿Ô: glad you read it-like someone somewhere.
Someone somewhere
Is living
Believing
Smiling
Making love
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...thought finally ended on a positive note:)...
... just a make believe?
reminds me--- weezer's "Other way" is tough.
hope it's okay to post comments
Good stuff again! But, didn't quite follow
In a glow of hope
With baby soap
Someone somewhere
Is crooning
baby soap?
Very very nice! Loved the change the emotional ride! Btw, the blog looks pretty neat now.. :)
someone somewhere is nodding, and beaming, and feeling.
The same.
I like the way you think, blotty.
never clot the blot.
"Smiling
Making love
Making believe"
Indeed :)
The last few lines were wonderful!
I actually read it out loud to someone. So simple it has an effect.
Anon: of course its ok, so long as you pay me compliments!:)
ghost...: wrote to you
xfreakx:thanks. needed that feedback on the layout
TTIM: will try not to
Aria:yes indeed! Its what I do better than a lot of things.(just the last line!)
Sirreene:music ...wow.thank you.
Sinusoidally:you did? oops, I'd better try it myself next time, before I post anything. thanks for visiting.
The way you make things rhyme with a few words and a million implications...amazing!!! Usually, I like a few lines from any poem, but you always manage to make the whole thing worth remembering.
my fav
With a cracked lip
No water to sip
Someone somewhere
Is sinking....
awesome...
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