Sun shining outside my window. Inside my window.
Outside my head. Inside her head.
A dream of flaxen curls on my pillow.
So sheer, so soft, it startles
and scares with its sweetness.
Lightly caressing the still white linen,
they play hide and seek with the errant sunlight
Now pale, now sparkling brighter
than the stars in my eyes.
A fresh wind blows them tantalisingly awry,
and I notice many many more
beneath those first
fulsome fragrant folds.
Waves like wanton waifs
Washing over a weary world of wanderers-
wayward, weary, wishing, wanting, waiting...
If curls could shake the world-
this is it, this is it.
No fire, no smoke, no ashes to stoke.
And yet, why should it take a million years
before I can let my fingertips
dance to their maddeningly mellow tune?
Shhhh...tread gently.
You know she'll never wake
but be careful,
for you just may.
Monday, February 27
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18 comments:
god! you write beautifully!
How do you find words and play with them like this?
:)
PS. oh! i remember, i have to mail! :)
god! you write beautifully!
How do you find words and play with them like this?
:)
PS. oh! i remember, i have to mail! :)
yeah nice.
started of well. nice flow. real slow. right inbetween. but the last few lines..very obscured. couldnt make head or tail,. what were you trying to say or rhyme!?
bingo! v nice :)
Aparna: thanks , and wish I knew. Have responded.
Death: did you think this was a love poem? Perhaps its about a dead woman lusting after a curly haired lad! Read it backwards.
Prerona: took your advice after all.
Lovely piece! beautiful web of words too :)
Xcellent :)
reading backwards :(
Dead woman lusting after a curly haired lad? Hmm. Interesting. Wonder why I got the sexes mixed up when I read it. A deliberate lack of clarity in it? Or an inadvertent lack of clarity in me?
Brilliant. Count me as a permanent visitor now. Too good.
xFreakx, VP, V:thanks
I: makes me wonder too. And I only suggested one interpretation where there could be quite a number. Clarity is for the insecure so quit worrying about it.
xFreakx, VP, V:thanks
I: makes me wonder too. And I only suggested one interpretation where there could be quite a number. Clarity is for the insecure so quit worrying about it.
AAAAAAGGGHHH!!!!!! you haven't been reading porphyria's lover (browning) now, have you?
I like the play between dreams and reality. Who's awake and who's asleep?
Good poem...
"If curls could shake the world-
this is it, this is it."
:) i like this part the best .. blotty keep blotting :)
good one.
although it didn't enter my brain but i can say this was a good effort.
keep it up.
and thanks for visiting bewajah
CA: I like it. (Browning I mean)
Mermaid: your guess is as good as mine
Vanathi, Sangeeta, KC: thanks
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